I think that your pitch was really good. I like that you repeat "customer service" many times in your pitch because that is what your business is about. I realize that these are our first pitches so if I am supposed to give you any constructive criticism, then it would be that I think that you could crunch a little more information in there. Throwing in a statistic or two makes your pitch sound more effective or feasible. You talking about public service, you could say something like, "businesses with better customer service have shown to receive *blank*% more revenue/returning customers than those will poor customer service." (Or something). Overall though, great job.
Robert, you did a great job with your pitch. It seems that you already have some kind of experience with this. You really sound like an entrepreneur! The only thing that I think you should work on is simply just speaking up a little more. Regardless, you did a great job with gestures as well as painting the picture. I look forward to your next pitch!
Hey Robert, I think that you did a great job with your pitch. Even though this is only our first pitch You did such a good job at staying enthusiastic and the whole time you were very confident and while watching the whole video it felt like you were talking directly to the audience.
Hey Robert, great content and attire for this pitch. Not a whole lot of recommendations just for the overall pitch, you're quite soft-spoken. This isn't a problem in and of itself, but it gives you a great opportunity to bring emphasis to whichever parts of the pitch matter most to you by raising your volume for these parts. Hopefully that helps it all come together!
I think that your pitch was really good. I like that you repeat "customer service" many times in your pitch because that is what your business is about. I realize that these are our first pitches so if I am supposed to give you any constructive criticism, then it would be that I think that you could crunch a little more information in there. Throwing in a statistic or two makes your pitch sound more effective or feasible. You talking about public service, you could say something like, "businesses with better customer service have shown to receive *blank*% more revenue/returning customers than those will poor customer service." (Or something). Overall though, great job.
ReplyDeleteRobert, you did a great job with your pitch. It seems that you already have some kind of experience with this. You really sound like an entrepreneur! The only thing that I think you should work on is simply just speaking up a little more. Regardless, you did a great job with gestures as well as painting the picture. I look forward to your next pitch!
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ReplyDeleteI think that you did a great job with your pitch. Even though this is only our first pitch You did such a good job at staying enthusiastic and the whole time you were very confident and while watching the whole video it felt like you were talking directly to the audience.
Hey Robert, great content and attire for this pitch. Not a whole lot of recommendations just for the overall pitch, you're quite soft-spoken. This isn't a problem in and of itself, but it gives you a great opportunity to bring emphasis to whichever parts of the pitch matter most to you by raising your volume for these parts. Hopefully that helps it all come together!
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